Teh Wozzinator

it's probably just because you have a great story that lots of people will want to read. :-D you know...if you ever have time...maybe you could look at my "magic ...

i realize how it could be mistaken for a girlfriend...i tried to mention the father at the start, but it just wouldn't work. btw, i haven't had experience with father ...

this was was short, so not much to edit, i don't think, and i have to go eat lunch, but i'm curious...are they foxes? you never explain anything but "fox ...

aedomir, i was just wondering...how do you get so many reviews? lol! i just noticed yours because i had finished a review and went back to the homepage and yours ...

wow. you are a great, great writer. i just did a really long review, so i don't have time for a long one here, but i will say this: you ...

ok, here's edits for chapter two. sorry, i'm going to post each chapter seperately cuz it's really confusing. i'm also going to put a space between each paragraph so i ...

oops, i don't know what happened here...i accidently hit submit, and then stop, i think oh, and on my next post, i forgot to put parentheses around my bold parts....i'll ...

chapter one: wow, that was really confusing and fast...you need to slow down the plot a LOT. it's like boom, boom, boom, boom, boom. give us some background info on ...

hey, here's a couple of tips when writing on YWS (i know from experience because i did these same things). a lot more people will read if you put a ...

the reason i capitalized actually is because of this: since he's writing in a journal, he isn't actually italicizing all of that stuff. and it's really hard to italicize in ...

for your first edit...i did put rotten at first, but i thought that that sounded way too clichei. and yes, i agree with you about the spaces between dashes--thanks for ...

btw, i used LOL because that's what the guy thought. normally i wouldn't use it. and i have a reason for describing the phone like that... i'm doing this thing ...

just one comment on the first paragraph...i have rewritten the entire paragraph, so that it's more descriptive and less run-on-ish. i also rewrote some of the other stuff. what i ...

that's what i meant by "It wasn't an addiction", read on and you'll see why he bought the chocolate

well, again, again, again, again, i agree with Jabber on all the grammar. ;-P i really like the plot, how she's trying to be a good guy, but she keeps ...